silverthorn: (White Collar Fanfiction)
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Title: Hallmark
Author:  [livejournal.com profile] bardoni
Summary:  Peter gets some mail.  Coda 1x01
Rating: PG
Characters/Pairing:  Peter Burke, Neal Caffrey
Warnings: No beta, sorry!
Spoilers: Spoilers for 1x01, though they are minor and most of them have already been referenced in the promos and scene clips USA had up. 
Author's Note:   I've never written for a fandom as new as this one so my grasp of the characters are still rather shaky. I wish I had a few more episodes under my belt before I tackled any codas, but this piece begged to be written.  More A/N under cuts for spoilery content.

To be honest, I have no idea how old Peter is. I know that Tim DeKay was in 1963, making him 46 now. I decided to use Tim’s age as an estimate for Peter. Forgive me.

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The first card is traditional, Hallmark, and Peter opens it with nitrile gloves and tweezers because you never know with Caffrey. The card is sleek and mahogany, like the wine bottle it is emulating.

 

‘Mr. Peter Burke. A FINE VINTAGE: A fruity old number, matured for 50 years. Bottled in Manhattan. The perfect wine for the perfect man.’ The picture is from a press conference taken two days after Caffrey was arrested and tried.   

 

Neal’s got it wrong anyway—he’s 42, not 50.

 

$$$

 

The next card comes almost a year to the day and Peter shoves it in the recycle without giving it a second glance. When he comes back from the office, it is sitting next to his plate at the table and Elizabeth arches an eyebrow and is fighting a smile.

 

“So, Peter, are you seeing someone on the side or is there another reason why someone is sending you lilac scented birthday cards from prison?” The card goes back in the recycle bin after dinner.

 

$$$

 

The third card is electronic and Peter nearly swears when he realizes what it is. He starts to run a virus scan before actually looking at what Neal sent him. 

 

‘Peter— It was either an online card or a paper one that read, “Have a FUN-tabulous fifth birthday”. Since I’ve finally earned computer privileges, I decided to try a different media. Happy Birthday. N. C.’ 

 

It is then his computer decides to finish loading the audio file and a resounding rendition of “For He’s a Jolly Good Fellow” causes several other agents to look up.

 

$$$

 

The fourth card comes at a bad time.   The Dutchman is proving to be just as elusive as the name suggests and Peter’s getting no where fast. The card is placed on the desk at home and forgotten. Three weeks later they blow a vault containing Canadian security strips and Neal walks out of a high security prison four months before his four year sentence is up.

 

$$$

 

The fifth card is handed to him one morning over a dark roasted Italian import and boconnotti. It is a little less than a year into Neal’s second four year sentence, and the two have finally fallen into a professional stride that doesn’t leave Peter itching to put the other man back behind bars. 

 

Peter takes it and flips it open with his thumb as he takes another sip and snorts into his cup. ‘Peter-- Happy 48th Birthday. Here is to many more. Neal.’

 

“What?” Neal decides not to look up, scanning the Arts and Culture section. “’A true friend remembers your birthday, not your age.’”
 



Mods, can I have an author tag?  Readers, can I have a beta?

Date: 2009-10-25 01:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] josiefier.livejournal.com
Awww! And I LOVE your icon... Oh why can't every ep. end with a make out session between those two? :le sigh: I do love the fic though - especially Neal's last line.

Date: 2009-10-25 01:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
Thank you~! I can't believe I have a review already-- you're so quick.

I love the chemistry between the characters and I know that it will only get better as the season goes on.

Date: 2009-10-25 01:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] the_con_cept.livejournal.com
Lovely! It fits the characters well, has the undercurrent of sweetness the show exhibits (well, I think the show exhibits an undercurrent of sweetness anyway) and the dollar signs for scene breaks are a really elegant little touch!

Date: 2009-10-25 01:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
Thank you for your comment! I tried to stay as loyal to the characters as I could but it was so difficult having only the first episode to work with. And, the dollar signs were a last minute addition when I realized I didn't have any breaks. SHIFT+4 is easy to reach. :)

Date: 2009-10-25 01:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hiratsu.livejournal.com
Your post has been tagged. :)

Adorable fic! :D I really don't hve anything to say other then that. Despite only going off of one episode, it really seems to capture the characters very well. Nice work!

And your icon is epic!

Date: 2009-10-25 01:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
Thank you very much for the tags and the comment!

What do you think, is it too early for a December fic exchange? :)

Date: 2009-10-25 01:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kira-bouviea.livejournal.com
You! This was awesome and considering we've only had one episode so far I thought the characterization was very good.

Date: 2009-10-25 02:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
You!! Thank you so much for your review.

P.S. I still love your icon. XD

Date: 2009-10-25 02:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alexwolfchan.livejournal.com
This fic is adorable & I can so totally believe this happen and I think you did a great job on the characterization. I can't wait to see the next episode to see how their friendship develops. I love that you put Elizabeth in this little coda. She so will joke around that her husband has a gay lover.

BTW I love your icon.

Date: 2009-10-25 02:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
Thank you very much for the review! I really liked Elizabeth- strong willed, not pushy, and very classy. I can't wait to see where they go with her character.

Date: 2009-10-25 02:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] maisontv.livejournal.com
I was waiting for someone to write something about the birthday cards. I love the idea of Neal sending cards for the wrong age.

Very good. Don't worry, I think your characterization is spot on.

Date: 2009-10-25 02:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
Thank you for the review! From what I've seen so far, Neal is a details-man, but I bet even he couldn't resist poking a little fun at Peter. Or, rather, Peter's age.

P.S.: TWINS!

Date: 2009-10-25 02:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] donutsweeper.livejournal.com
Aww, this is really sweet.

And I didn't see any grammar or punctuation errors that would call for a beta

Date: 2009-10-25 02:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
Thank you very much for the review! I am always tentative about posting; my mind tends to go faster than my fingers and things get jumbled. I figure having a few extra pairs of eyes look at it never hurts.

Date: 2009-10-25 08:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] r-chama.livejournal.com
Howdy. I came across this while looking for White Collar fic I knew someone was bound to have written. I like the angle, with describing each birthday card. Very cute. :]

Date: 2009-10-25 11:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
Thank you for reading! I'm very happy you liked it~ :)

Date: 2009-10-25 07:11 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] greenapple (from livejournal.com)
This is nice. I enjoyed reading.

Date: 2009-10-25 11:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bardoni.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

Date: 2009-10-26 04:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kalira9.livejournal.com
Awesome-sauce fic, I too (as someone else mentioned) was eager for someone to write something about the cards. As I'm a hardcore slasher I was of course seeing this through - what the heck? What colour lenses do slasher goggles have? Rainbow maybe, but that would be way too distracting to read through - anyway, my slasher goggles. I couldn't resist searching for fic already - I normally try to wait longer after a show premieres - and was delighted to find this - and several others as, unfortunately, before more shows have been aired the characterization and general quality is usually off. (I'll just gloss over the fact that I get all fandom-obsessive and there's never enough fic for me to gorge on so soon, shall I?)

Anyway, thanks for writing good fic, especially so soon, and I apoligize for the weird rambly comment - I really should not be allowed a computer (or at least, internet) on so little sleep.

~Kalira

P.S. The only things I noticed that a beta might have caught were; in the second section I wondered if you omitted the 'bin' after the first use of 'recycle bin' on purpose, and in the fourth section; 'nowhere' is generally one word, although I've seen exceptions.

Sorry for the nitpicking, and if you still need one - and want me to; I mean, I am kind of a random-(emphasis here) stranger - I'd be happy to beta for you.

nicely done

Date: 2009-10-26 08:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bluejeans14.livejournal.com
I enjoyed this. The show is very promising, and I hope you'll write more fanfics based upon it.

About suggested edits, I'm nitpickier (more nitpicky) than Kalira. In addition to the 2 things she mentioned (and you could use "recycling" instead of recycle bin, "recycle bin" being more commonly used as part of a computer), I'd suggest a few more changes, if you're interested.

"The card is sleek and mahogany" I would make "mahogany colored" or "mahogany-colored," because for a second I thought "what did he send that's made of wood?"

It appears the correct spelling is bocconotti, and I'm very angry at you for mentioning them because I can't bake and I don't know where to find some and I'd never heard of them before today and now I MUST have some, SOON! OK, minor tantrum over--sorry.

"I decided to try a different media" should technically be medium (media being plural usually), but media has become common usage. Don't know how picky Neal would be.

“’A true friend remembers your birthday, not your age.’”: if this is a quote, the first single quotation mark is facing the wrong way, and if it isn't, then the inner set of quotation marks should go. Is it a quote? From whom?

Aside from the possible addition of an occasional comma, that's it, nothing horrendous that would have made me grit my teeth or something.

Date: 2009-10-27 12:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lacks-a-life.livejournal.com
I absolutely love this, and I liked your characterization of Neal and Peter. hehe not sure what else to say, my thought process isn't the best when I'm in fangirl goo form ^_^

. . . oh! Love that you included Elizabeth, she already seems like a character I'm going to like a lot and I'm glad I'm not alone in the sentiment. ^_^

Date: 2009-11-06 02:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ursula4x.livejournal.com
Wonderful, sparkling, fun, well written.
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